Integrated writing - TPO 51

The main idea of both the reading and the lecture is some beliefs about elephants, amazing creatures in our era which live in herds and are indigenous to Asia and Africa. Although the reading mentions three main beliefs about these enormous animals, the lecturer finds them unrealistic and misunderstanding of the facts and provides some counter reasons to refute them all.

First of all, the reading states that elephants know when they are going to die and tend to break away from their herd and approach water bodies known as their "graveyards". However, the lecturer denies this fact, expressing that the elephants do not go toward such areas just because of getting alone there. They actually have a practical reason to go near the lakes of rivers. Their ability to chew their normal vegetation diet would be lower due to having old teeth, thus, they prefer to utilize softer plants which excessively grow near the bodies of water. Therefore, when they end up dying near water, their areas are named "graveyards".

Furthermore, the author presents the idea of their ability of sketching some recognizable art pieces. The lecturer, on the other hand, mentions strict instructors who train the elephants how to hold the brush by their trunk and tutor them how to paint some lines to be recognizable are responsible of their artistic sense, while the elephants do not understand any of those sketches and they are all learned

Eventually, the reading mentions the elephants' fear of mice, small mammals rather than tigers or lions has been accepted for a long time. In contrast, according to the lecturer, the reaction they have in front of mice is not due to their fear, but it is because the mice are unknown creatures by elephants which is an natural instinct to elephants to find unfamiliar animals as a treat to themselves. She also adds that elephants in zoos do not show such a behavior while confronting mice which means that no longer mice will jeopardize elephants' life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...unknown creatures by elephants which is an natural instinct to elephants to find u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1373.03311258 122% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00895522388 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87793396353 2.5805825403 112% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 145.348785872 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579104477612 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 419.366225166 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 21.2450331126 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.8598640869 49.2860985944 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.545454545 110.228320801 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4545454545 21.698381199 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4545454545 7.06452816374 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 53.8541721854 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.498013245 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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