TOEFL integrated writing: communal online encyclopedia
Encyclopedias are a collection of articles on various subjects. The passage compares communal online and traditional printed encyclopedias. In this comparison the passage states that the online encyclopedias may sound attractive but they are much less valuable as compared to traditional printed encyclopedias by introducing three problems in them. However, the lecturer rebuts all of the arguments presented in the passage by highlighting some improvements in the way online encyclopedias are handled in recent times.
Firstly, that passage states that the people who edit or create online encyclopedias are not qualified enough to contribute therefore most of the content is inaccurate to certain extend. On the other hand, the professor suggests that even traditional encyclopedias were never completely free of errors, hence many printed errors that remain in the printed versions for decades make them their content less accurate as compared to the online versions which are editable over times.
Furthermore, the passage suggests that due to increased number of hackers, after certain time the content of online encyclopedias is compromised due to fabrication and corruption in data. The professor does not agree with this thought and further explain that recently many strategies are introduced to tackle this issue by appointing editors who monitor the changes made by the internet users. Also, a format has been implemented in writing that no one can change to maintain to tackle such malpractices.
Lastly, that passage presents a concern regarding the fact that online encyclopedias focus too deeply on certain topics that may not be as important as a crucial historical event. This creates a confusion regarding which topic requires more attention for many students. Disagreeing with this argument, the lecturer states that due to limited space printed encyclopedias do not reflect great diversity of user's interest. The topics present in printed editorials are prioritised on the basis of judgement by a group and hence may not represent the view of a bigger community.
- Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Overall the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today s world Use reasons and details to support your opinion 16
- A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature novels plays and poems than they used to This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public for culture in general and for the futur 85
- Life today is much easier for new generations as compared to the older generations 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 379, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...s in them. However, the lecturer rebuts all of the arguments presented in the passage by h...
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Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...of the content is inaccurate to certain extend. On the other hand, the professor sugge...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, so, therefore, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 321.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.5046728972 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02333519497 2.5805825403 117% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548286604361 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 419.366225166 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.55342163355 116% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9463824887 49.2860985944 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.923076923 110.228320801 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 21.698381199 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215114113887 0.272083759551 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816033935886 0.0996497079465 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554774450361 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129955856542 0.162205337803 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618477934989 0.0443174109184 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.3589403974 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 53.8541721854 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.2367328918 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 63.6247240618 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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