TOEFL integrated writing: work a four-day week.

In this set of materials, the reading claims that the companies should offer four days work to their
employees, which provides benefits for whole economy, companies as well as individual
employees. However, in the lecture, the professor casted doubt on what is presented in the text and
refused every of the reasons given in the reading.
First, it is clearly stated in the reading that the company profits will effectively increase as
employees perform better in their work thanks to more resting time. However, the professor
disagrees with this idea. He explains from another angle that more employees leads to more costs
for the companies, because they need to spend more time on training and medical. Furthermore,
more office spaces and computers have to be provided for the additional number of employees,
which also furthers the costs. Considering these aspects, the more number of employees not only
help the companies but also harm their economic.
In addition, the professor disagrees with the point that four-day workweek decreases
unemployment rate. He point out that the significant rate of unemployment cannot be compensated
by a less number of jobs. Moreover, the four-day workweek policy will not provide new jobs
because the companies may force employees to do the works of five days within four days. This
can result in more pressure on employees.
Finally, although it is mentioned in the reading that the life quality of employees will be raised as
they have more free time, the professor provides some evidences to oppose this point of view. He
states that less number of working hours leads to instability in job situation. In particular, the
employees with four-day workweek have to face the risk of losing their job. This situation may
encourage them to prefer five-day workweek instead of accepting the risk of unemployment.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 23, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...rkweek decreases unemployment rate. He point out that the significant rate of unempl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, in addition, in particular, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 301.0 270.72406181 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2657807309 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66557005888 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 419.366225166 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6156923066 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.666666667 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 7.06452816374 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.09492273731 513% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140810189637 0.272083759551 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525652094716 0.0996497079465 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699828423513 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459314765977 0.162205337803 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667673319332 0.0443174109184 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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