In these set of material, both the passage and the professor are talking about if the Dinosaurs were endotherms or not. The reading states that, dinosaurs differ in many ways from modern reptiles , and there is now considerable evidence that dinosaurs were , in fact, endotherms. Conversely the speaker says that, many scientists disapproved that, in addition, all the reasons that mentioned in the passage are unconvincing.
First, the reading states that, one reason for believing that dinosaurs were endotherms is that dinosaur fossils have been discovered in polar regions. However the professor says that, the polar regions were much warmer than today, the animal could live there in the past, furthermore, they couldn't move to warmer areas, that's why they had remained in the polar areas. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates.
Second, the reading argues that, there is a connection between endothermy and the position and the movement of the legs. And the legs of modern endotherms are underneath the body, and so were the legs of dinosaur. But the speaker says that, this position of the dinosaurs' legs because they had need high energy for running, thus the body should support more weight. Thus the position of the legs give advantages to dinosaurs. This was another place where experience contradicted theory.
Third, the reading claims that, the bones of endotherm usually include structures called Haversian canals. And so were in the bones of dinosaurs and this suggests that the dinosaurs were endotherms. But the professor says that, this is right , but the dinosaur also have thickened rings in their bones allow them to grow quickly. So these rings were evidence for the growth rates, in addition these rings don't approve that the dinosaur are endotherms, because there are growing quickly even if the environment came cool.
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are talking about if the Dinosaurs were endotherms or not.
are talking about whether the Dinosaurs were endotherms or not.
all the reasons that mentioned in the passage are unconvincing.
all the reasons that are mentioned in the passage are unconvincing.
all the reasons mentioned in the passage are unconvincing.
because they had need high energy for running,
because they need high energy for running,
but the dinosaur also have thickened rings
but the dinosaurs also have thickened rings
Sentence: So these rings were evidence for the growth rates, in addition these rings don't approve that the dinosaur are endotherms, because there are growing quickly even if the environment came cool.
Description: A verb 'to be', past tense, 2nd person singular or all is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to were and evidence
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No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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No. of Words: 301 250
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Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 301 250
No. of Characters: 1514 1200
No. of Different Words: 150 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.03 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.5 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.177 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4