TOEFL T P O 12 - Integrated Writing Task
In the passage it was argued about the authenticity of the potrait of Jane Austen which came up for sale by a Austen family member of. The professor in his lecture casted doubt on the reasoning given in the passage.
Firstly, the passage described that as the potrait was put forward by a Auten family member, so it was an authentic potrait of Jane Austen. But the professor reasoned that, as Jane Austen was Dead for almost 70 years by the time the potrait came into light, the family members who brought the potrait to public had not seen her for sure. Thus, the assertion by them that it is the potrait of Jane is doubtful according to the professor.
Secondly, the professor pointed out in his lecture that the Austen family was an extended family. So, it is possible to have a family member of the same age as her at the time of the painting. Thus the potrait could be of a family member rather than of Jane Austen's. This can account for the resemblances of the ameteur potrait by her sister Cassandra with the the formal potrait. This opposes the idea put forward by the passage. The professor further explained an opinion by experts that it is believed that the protrait is actually of a niece of the famous novelist who was of the same age as the novelist at the time of that the potrait done.
Finally, the professor explained the point that the attribution of the painting to the famous painter is based on the based only the style of the painter. But an evidence contradicts the claim which was a stamp on the back of the canvas. The canvas on which the potrait was done was not being sold until Jane Austen was 27 years old. Which in turn contradicts the claim of the passage of it being the potrait of a teenage Jane Austen. Because the timeline of the canvas and the teenage Jane Austen does not coincide.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...f Jane Austen which came up for sale by a Austen family member of. The professor ...
^
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that as the potrait was put forward by a Auten family member, so it was an authe...
^
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...age as her at the time of the painting. Thus the potrait could be of a family member...
^^^^
Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ur potrait by her sister Cassandra with the the formal potrait. This opposes the idea p...
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Line 5, column 358, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ur potrait by her sister Cassandra with the the formal potrait. This opposes the idea p...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...old until Jane Austen was 27 years old. Which in turn contradicts the claim of the pa...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, firstly, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 30.3222958057 162% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45970149254 5.08290768461 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33967018675 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417910447761 0.540411800872 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.560258192 49.2860985944 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.375 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9375 21.698381199 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 7.06452816374 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.3589403974 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 12.2367328918 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 63.6247240618 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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