TOEFL T P O 31 Integrated Writing Task

The reading and the lecture are both about whether the fine lines covering the skeletal bones of Sinosauropteryx is served as feathers. The author of reading opposed this idea. The lecturer challenges the claims made by the writer. He is of the opinion that these explanations are faulty.

To begin with, the author suggests that the fine lines structure may formed after the animal's feath, which is demonstrate that it is not represent in the living dinosaur. The lecturer rebuts this claim made by the author. He mentions that this structure well served for the feather of the dinosaur.

Secondly, writer points out that we cannot sure which part of the dinosaur that hte structures were. He suggests that the lines covering the skeleton are fossilized remains of frills rather remains of feathers. The professor opposed this idea. He said that the chemical research reveals that the frills are not contain proteins. However, the fossial contains protein, which is shows that the skin fibers are not the remains of frills.

Finally, the author mentions that the Sinosauropteryx fossil were mostly positioned at the backbone and the tail of animal. As a result, the linese can not serve the usual function of feathers that are help animals fly and control temprerature. The lectuerer, in contrast, feels that the feathers of the dinosaurs have color so, it may served the other function like attract the mate. This function is called display function. He also mentions that many bird today have such a feather in their tail and also used to attract mate.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he author of reading opposed this idea. The lecturer challenges the claims made by ...
^^^
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'demonstrated'.
Suggestion: demonstrated
...ormed after the animals feath, which is demonstrate that it is not represent in the living ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'represented'.
Suggestion: represented
...th, which is demonstrate that it is not represent in the living dinosaur. The lecturer re...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'contained'.
Suggestion: contained
...esearch reveals that the frills are not contain proteins. However, the fossial contains...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, may, second, secondly, so, well, in contrast, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 1373.03311258 95% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02692307692 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52130272986 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515384615385 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2517383301 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8823529412 110.228320801 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2941176471 21.698381199 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.3589403974 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.2367328918 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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