TOEFL TPO 37 integrated writing question
The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about whether using a turtle excluder device, TED, is an effective way for protection of turtle species. In the text, the author claims that these devices are not practical for few reasons. The lecturer challenges all the arguments mentioned in the reading passage, and she believes none of them is logical.
Firstly, the author states that the number of turtle which get trapped by shrimp fishers are very low. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that although every fishing boat catches about one turtle every month, the number of boats in area are very high. By considering this issue, the numerous turtle will catch every years. Because turtle's population are very low, using TED is very viable.
Moreover, the author asserts that they are some alternative methods which should be used rather than using TED. Besides, these methods can shorten the time as well. The lecturer, on the other hand, rebuts this idea by pointing out that the methods which mentioned in the reading are good way theoretically, but they are not usable in real situation. Furthermore, she says that these devices do not implement in all boats. Thus, the methods which mentioned in the passage is impossible in real experiment.
Eventually, the author holds the opinion that TEDs are not efficacious method for larger species of endangered sea turtles. The lecturer, however, dismisses this idea by asserting that although the TED is very small device, it can be easily modified for using for larger species. Additionally, she says that all the turtle which are colonized in this area are small so TEDs could be useful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... practical for few reasons. The lecturer challenges all the arguments mentioned i...
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...he believes none of them is logical. Firstly, the author states that the numb...
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...r brings up the idea that although every fishing boat catches about one turtle ev...
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... very low, using TED is very viable. Moreover, the author asserts that they a...
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...ge is impossible in real experiment. Eventually, the author holds the opinion...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1387.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 278.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98920863309 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47301308043 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525179856115 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2215762219 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4666666667 110.228320801 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 7.06452816374 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.3589403974 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.2367328918 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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