TPO-03 - Integrated Writing Task Rembrandt is the most famous of the seventeenth-century Dutch painters. However, there are doubts whether some paintings attributed to Rembrandt were actually painted by him. One such painting is known as attributed to Rem

My personal experience showed me that both keeping old friends and making new ones is important: it depends on the different needs of life.
When I left my country to move in France for studying I tried to keep in contact with all my Italian friends in order to feel less far from home and to keep in mind where I am from, especially in some moments of loneliness. After several months nearly all the persons I considered as friends keep less and less in contact with me, making me understand that we were experiencing different stages of our life and therefore it was difficult to keep the same relationship we had before because everyone was growing in a different way.
In the meanwhile I found new friends at university and I started to discover new kinds of relationships, sometimes very different from the ones I was habituate to. For example at the beginning I found very strange the fact that French young people use to see each others in the cafe and spend their time and their money there smoking, chatting and drinking. With my Italian friends we use to see each other outside, near the seaside for a volleyball match indeed or at someones`s home in the evening to make a pizza party together, without spending too much money.
These different habits make me think about how different could be one culture compare to another and how difficult would have been for me to keep the same relationship with both types of friends.
On one side I preferred the way I behaved with my old friends and I missed them, but on the other side, I realized the necessity of seeking for new friends, so I tried to agree to their habits and I experienced something else.
Today I can say that this kind of experience has been very useful for me. Last summer, coming back home for holidays I organized a party to my house nearby the mountains and I invited both French new friends and my Italians old ones. The result was that with the new ones I experienced something they have never done before, and this strengthened our friendship, whereas with the old ones I felt home like every time, as I had never left, as our friendship had never been changed.
To conclude, I think both old and new friends are very important, because trough them we can learn about our self and our changes in anytime; sometimes they are the mirror of what we were and what we become.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 511, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...had before because everyone was growing in a different way. In the meanwhile I found new friends ...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'habituated'.
Suggestion: habituated
...imes very different from the ones I was habituate to. For example at the beginning I foun...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...range the fact that French young people use to see each others in the cafe and spen...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nd drinking. With my Italian friends we use to see each other outside, near the sea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, for example, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 7.30242825607 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 62.0 22.412803532 277% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 30.3222958057 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1373.03311258 141% => OK
No of words: 426.0 270.72406181 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55633802817 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.04702891845 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56111462412 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 145.348785872 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49765258216 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.25165562914 399% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 21.2450331126 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.8352611607 49.2860985944 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.75 110.228320801 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 21.698381199 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.09492273731 171% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0860136554826 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.038110513925 0.0996497079465 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234787626465 0.0662205650399 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0447452113589 0.162205337803 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276403212803 0.0443174109184 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.3589403974 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.2367328918 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.7273730684 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.498013245 152% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.2008830022 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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