TPO-04 - Integrated Writing Task Endotherms are animals such as modern birds and mammals that keep their body temperatures constant. For instance, humans are endotherms and maintain an internal temperature of 37°C, no matter whether the environment is wa

Reading and lecture are both debating whether or not dinosaurs were endotherms, which means if they were cold-blooded or warm-blooded animals. On the one hand, the writer states that they were endotherms, providing three reasons of support. However, the lecturer casts doubts on the claims made but the writer, saying that his arguments have some problems when compared to real facts.

First, Polar Regions used to have different temperatures millions of years ago, namely, these were higher than at present times. In other words, it can be safely assumed that the temperatures were high enough to sustain animals that were not endotherms, at least during summer. Furthermore, dinosaurs might have emigrated or hibernated if the temperatures dropped down to much during winter, as modern reptiles do nowadays. This standpoint refutes the writer's point of view

Second, the legs' position can be explained by other theory. This particular position offers more advantages than just using them the legs for running, such as supporting the weight of large animals. Therefore, contrary to what the passage sustains, this is not a physical feature that provides proof that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Third, it is true that dinosaurs have Haversian canals, which are responsible for animals' growth. But, at the same time, dinosaurs had growth rings as well, which show the periods when dinosaurs' growth was active. According to these, dinosaurs registered a fast growth when temperatures were high, and started to decrease or even stop, during cooler seasons, whereas endotherms' growing process is not diminished or halted by cold. As a result, the theory stated by the author is rejected once again.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Reading and lecture are both debating whether or not dinosaurs were endotherms, which means ...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...rnated if the temperatures dropped down to much during winter, as modern reptiles ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, well, whereas, at least, such as, as a result, in other words, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 268.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35447761194 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6565146452 2.5805825403 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64552238806 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8489509334 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.384615385 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6153846154 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06452816374 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377668699071 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122008599676 0.0996497079465 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678642715319 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209508647353 0.162205337803 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297868696891 0.0443174109184 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.52 8.42419426049 113% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 63.6247240618 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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