TPO-19 - Integrated Writing Task Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people

The reading passage and the lecture are both about cons and pros of new type of promotion nmed buzzers. The author of the snippet believes that buzzers should be bunned because they cause dishonesty and destroy social relations. On the other hand, the man, buzzler, considers that the statements made in the reading passager are exaggerated and misleading, and he reinforces his opinion by provideing several examples.

First of all, there is identifed in the reading fragment that buzzers who are paid to praise the product will tell incorrect information about it to increase its sellings. However, the speaker asserts that buzzers from the begining are the people who were successfully have used this product previously, and companies are usually hire such satisfied consumers for working as a buzzer. Consequently, buzzer promotes the product which he also likes to use, and he don’t need to lie about thing that he already likes.

the subsequent lectrer argument is related to the statement made int he excerpt that the buzzers benefit manufectureres but harm consumers. The speaker disputed this by claiming that if companies are able to hire buzzres it means that they respectful in the society, because there are a lot of people who like their product and want to advertise it by sharing their own experience, such as using the telefone network.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'hired'.
Suggestion: hired
...t previously, and companies are usually hire such satisfied consumers for working as...
^^^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does', 'dons'.
Suggestion: does; dons
...duct which he also likes to use, and he don apos;t need to lie about thing that he ...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e about thing that he already likes. the subsequent lectrer argument is related ...
^^^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'excerpts'.
Suggestion: excerpts
...is related to the statement made int he excerpt that the buzzers benefit manufectureres...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1142.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 223.0 270.72406181 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12107623318 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67640509673 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618834080717 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.9408573316 49.2860985944 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.75 110.228320801 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.875 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.125 7.06452816374 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266803686602 0.272083759551 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104643872763 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699754186208 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164431574061 0.162205337803 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485235813093 0.0443174109184 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.42419426049 114% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:

para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3

Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).

Don't need a conclusion paragraph.

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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