TPO 23 integrated essay

The reading states that, population of the yellow cedar have been declining for more than a century now. And it provides three hypothesis for supporting. In contrast, the professor says that, unfortunately we just don't know the causes of declination. And he refutes each cause in the reading.

First, the reading claims that, the yellow cedar decline may be caused by insect parasites, like the cedar bark beetle. However, the professor opposite this point by explaining that, the problem of this point is this, the healthy cedar trees are more resistant to the insects than other trees, and the healthy cedar trees are unlikely to suffer from insect. In addition, the bark beetle may attack the trees that already damaged or sick. So the insect isn't the fundemental cause.

Second, the reading averse that, the brown bears cause the decline of yellow cedar. On the other hand, the professor refutes this point by saying that, some trees are attacked by bears. But , bears didn't cause the decline of yellow cedar. And he adds that, trees where in Island which no bears in it. So the trees declined with and without the presence of bears, so , the bears didn't responsible for this declination.

Third, the reading argues that, the gradual changes of climate may be to blame. Conversely, the professor contends that, the reading didn't mention that the trees increased their elevation in cold weather and they decreased their elevation in warm weather. And most of trees damaged in warm climate. He concedes that, the root is sensitive, but unfortunately , this cause wasn't killing the trees.

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The reading states that, population of the yellow cedar have been declining
The reading states that, the population ... has been declining

the professor opposite this point
the professor is opposite to this point

may attack the trees that already damaged or sick
may attack the trees that are already damaged or sick
may attack the trees already damaged or sick

trees where in Island which no bears in it.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?

the bears didn't responsible for this declination.
the bears are not responsible for this declination.

And most of trees damaged in warm climate.
And most of trees are damaged in warm climate.

Sentence: So the insect isn't the fundemental cause.
Description: The fragment ' t the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace t with verb, past tense

Sentence: So the insect isn't the fundemental cause.
Error: fundemental Suggestion: fundamental

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 17 12
No. of Words: 271 250
No. of Characters: 1276 1200
No. of Different Words: 127 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.367 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.922 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4