TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The reading article talks about the animal tissues found in the T. Rex fossil recently found along with the supporting details about the discovery of tissues. The lecture disagrees with the details mentioned in the passage and suggests there is not enough evidence to hold those details true.

First, the reading article points out that, broken bone of T. Rex revealed channels for blood vessels and the soft material found could be actual blood vessels. The lecture counters this theory and states that, it is highly unlikely to have blood vessels preserved for millions of years. Usually bacteria colonize the bones and leave behind traces of organic material. The soft and moist substance could be the residue left by bacterial activity.

Next, the reading passage argues that, microscopic examination revealed presence of spheres similar to red blood cells. Tests showed Iron is present, which is crucial for Oxygen transportation. However, the lecture refutes the claim and points out that, the same spheres were found in fossils of other animals, especially primitive animals which did not have red blood cells. There is a high chance the spheres are of any reddish mineral.

Lastly, the reading talks about, tests conducted on T. Rex leg bone showed presence of collagen- a fibrous protein. It is usually found in bone tissues. The lecture argues that, Collagen is found in fossils which are not older than 1000 years. It is impossible to find Collagen in 70 million years old fossil of T. Rex. Moreover, the professor adds that, human skin contains Collagen and the Collagen found could be of researchers’ handling the bones.

In conclusion, the lecture refuses all the claims presented in the reading article and states that it is highly unlikely that the bones have preserved animal tissues.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he spheres are of any reddish mineral. Lastly, the reading talks about, tests c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, lastly, moreover, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17288135593 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47380066786 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505084745763 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 453.6 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5557839559 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3157894737 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5263157895 21.698381199 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68421052632 7.06452816374 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.27373068433 281% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38603278358 0.272083759551 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118379857326 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07937801295 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193792741205 0.162205337803 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087779740097 0.0443174109184 198% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 53.8541721854 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.0289183223 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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