TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The article states that researcher finally can find tissue in dinasaur's fossil. and provides three reasons of support. In contrast, the professor explains that we cannot rely on this evidences because it is not feasible and repudiates each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading claims that researcher could find blood vessels on the fossils. Conversely, the speaker refutes this points by imparting that it should be something else. He asserts that bacteria start grow inside of the bone, and it is higjly possible that the moist of the bacteria remains in hollows, rather than blood vessels of the dinosaur.

In adition, the passage points that they can find some red substance in sphere and it is the remain of the red blood cells.. However, the lecture says that it was misleadingly. According to the professor this red substance was also find some animals on that region, but that animals didn't have any blood vessels.

Finally, the text contents that there is collagen in the fossils that they found. On the contrary, the lecture opposes this point by expressing that it is not possible due to the maximum ages that collagen can be alive is one thousund years and absolutely 70-millions years is not possible. Maybe collagens belongs from the researchers skins. We also learn that there is not any available tissure from the dinosaur's era.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ly can find tissue in dinasaurs fossil. and provides three reasons of support. In c...
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Line 2, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rofessor explains that we cannot rely on this evidences because it is not feasibl...
^^
Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...fessor explains that we cannot rely on this evidences because it is not feasible an...
^^^^
Line 6, column 90, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... some red substance in sphere and it is the remain of the red blood cells.. However, the l...
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Line 6, column 123, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... it is the remain of the red blood cells.. However, the lecture says that it was m...
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Line 6, column 233, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...e professor this red substance was also find some animals on that region, but that a...
^^^^
Line 6, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...nimals on that region, but that animals didnt have any blood vessels. Finally, the...
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Line 8, column 407, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'dinosaurs'' or 'dinosaur's'?
Suggestion: dinosaurs'; dinosaur's
...e is not any available tissure from the dinosaurs era.
^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'conversely', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'may', 'so', 'in contrast', 'on the contrary']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252964426877 0.261695866417 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.142292490119 0.158904122519 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0592885375494 0.0723426182421 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0671936758893 0.0435111971325 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0434782608696 0.0277247811725 157% => OK
Prepositions: 0.146245059289 0.128828473217 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0118577075099 0.0370669169778 32% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.49274992281 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00790513833992 0.0208969081088 38% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.126482213439 0.128158765124 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0237154150198 0.0158828679856 149% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0114777025283 0% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1381.0 1645.83664459 84% => OK
No of words: 229.0 271.125827815 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.03056768559 6.08160592843 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.04852973271 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375545851528 0.374372842146 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.305676855895 0.287516216867 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.196506550218 0.187439937562 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113537117904 0.113142543107 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49274992281 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554585152838 0.539623497131 103% => OK
Word variations: 52.7526472226 53.8517498576 98% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0529801325 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6153846154 21.7502111507 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.680336358 49.3711431718 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.230769231 132.220823453 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6153846154 21.7502111507 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.878197800319 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.39072847682 236% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.1830702049 50.5018328374 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.625 1.90840788429 85% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.641693840686 0.549887131256 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106824143651 0.142949733639 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0714698551512 0.0787303798458 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.627195622076 0.631733273073 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.184309994467 0.139662658121 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.281743184764 0.266732575781 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132179397892 0.103435571967 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.310665199902 0.414875509568 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.182525022984 0.0530846634433 344% => No any connections among paragraphs
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372272139237 0.40443939384 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.203869269836 0.0528353158467 386% => Less connections among paragraphs

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.26048565121 258% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.62251655629 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 10.0 3.1766004415 315% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.2958057395 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Sentence: In contrast, the professor explains that we cannot rely on this evidences because it is not feasible and repudiates each of the author's reasons.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and evidences

this red substance was also find some animals on that region
this red substance was also found in some animals on that region

due to the maximum ages that collagen can be alive is one thousund years
Description: check books how to use 'due to'.

Sentence: He asserts that bacteria start grow inside of the bone, and it is higjly possible that the moist of the bacteria remains in hollows, rather than blood vessels of the dinosaur.
Error: higjly Suggestion: highly

Sentence: In adition, the passage points that they can find some red substance in sphere and it is the remain of the red blood cells..
Error: adition Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: On the contrary, the lecture opposes this point by expressing that it is not possible due to the maximum ages that collagen can be alive is one thousund years and absolutely 70-millions years is not possible.
Error: thousund Suggestion: thousand

Sentence: We also learn that there is not any available tissure from the dinosaur's era.
Error: tissure Suggestion: No alternate word

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 227 250
No. of Characters: 1101 1200
No. of Different Words: 125 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.85 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.429 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.587 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4