TPO-29 - Integrated Writing Task Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold,arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive,

The article discusses a interesting historical topic of migration of dinasors in search of food during the winters and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that none of the points seem convincing and opposes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading passage states that edmontosaur survive exclusively on plants and in winter there would be no plants growing in so they migrate. In contrast, the professor provides information that summer were hotter in artic then than they are today. He explains this weather would have helped in growing of large number of plants which are more than the consumption of edmontosaur and the remnants of these plants can be used by edmontosaur to feed on. Clearly a disparity exists between the article and the evidence provided by the professor. As a result we can safely assumes that edmontosaur would have not migrated for food.
Second, the article pushes forth the idea that edmontosaur lived in herd and migrated in herd and moving in herd coordinate their migration. However the classroom discussion contends that living in herd doesnt support the fact that migrate in herd. He explains that they might move in herd as it is to predate while being in herd. Moreover, they are safe being in herd. Consequently we can argue that staying in herd doesn't bolster the fact they migrate.
Third, the reading posits that as edmontosaur are capable of migrating long distances with high speed, it is easy for them to migrate. The professor refutes the point by explaining that not all edmontosaur are capable of running at high speeds. The exception is juvenile as they are young and are incapable of running at high speeds. The edmontosaur could not leave them as it is unsafe for them staying alone.
In summary, while both passage and discussion provide interesting information with regards to migration of edmontosaur, a significant amount of evidence supports that edmontosaur hadn't migrated because of the reasons given by the author. Therefore, the passage fails to justify the reasons given in support of migration of edmontosaur.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The article discusses a interesting historical topic of migrati...
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Line 2, column 575, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'assume'
Suggestion: assume
...he professor. As a result we can safely assumes that edmontosaur would have not migrate...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ing in herd coordinate their migration. However the classroom discussion contends that ...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...discussion contends that living in herd doesnt support the fact that migrate in herd. ...
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Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... Moreover, they are safe being in herd. Consequently we can argue that staying in herd doesn...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ently we can argue that staying in herd doesnt bolster the fact they migrate. Third, ...
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Line 4, column 205, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t by explaining that not all edmontosaur are capable of running at high speeds. T...
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Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...re incapable of running at high speeds. The edmontosaur could not leave them as it ...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...t of evidence supports that edmontosaur hadnt migrated because of the reasons given b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, third, while, in contrast, in summary, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 30.3222958057 171% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 346.0 270.72406181 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10115606936 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70029599297 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488439306358 0.540411800872 90% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 419.366225166 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1144577099 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0555555556 110.228320801 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2222222222 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338846091159 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110104029194 0.0996497079465 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779501500599 0.0662205650399 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176360994617 0.162205337803 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503924720597 0.0443174109184 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 63.6247240618 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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