The reading and lecture both discussed myth about burning mirror. While reading says that syracuse city under attacked by roman navy but greek used an ingenious weapon named burning mirror to protect them self. The reading also say that burning mirror was myth and provides three reasons of support. However, the lecture say that story of mirror is not a myth and their reasons is inconveniencing and professor refutes each of the readings reasons.
First of all, the reading passage claims that greek were not technologically advanced to build such weapons. The reading passage says that parabolic mirror was very precise and manufacturing technology of large sheet of copper was not exist on that time. However, the lecture refutes this point by say that on that time mathematician have that formula to build such huge size parabolic mirror. Furthermore, the professor also say that small pic of mirror are add together and possible to make such parabola.
In addition, the reading makes the argument that burning mirror would take long time to burn a wooden object. The reading says that sun ray's takes ten minutes to burn 30 meters away wooden object. The lecture refutes this claims by pointing out that roman navy are not only used to make ship ,they also used pich to protect the ship from water and this pich are burn with in second. So it is not a big problem to make fire the ship.
Finally, the reading passage argues that greek have more update weapons to attacked so why they make burning mirror. The reading also Say that flaming arrows range and burning mirror range are same. The professor refutes this claims by pointing out that roman navy were familer with flaming and they have protection. But in the case of burning mirror it attacked suddenly and no one traced that. So it is more effective weapons to attack.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, second, so, while, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 315.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84444444444 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31296367404 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 145.348785872 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.0 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2033595983 49.2860985944 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7647058824 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 21.698381199 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413393792066 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153084920519 0.0996497079465 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523360321553 0.0662205650399 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267774504029 0.162205337803 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252747314822 0.0443174109184 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.42419426049 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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