TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

The article states that burning mirror that have been used by the Greeks to defend themselves against the Roman is just a myth and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor states that the article’s claim about the Greeks are not capable of built this device is not convincing and she refutes each of the author’s reasons.

First, the reading avers that the Greeks did not enough sophisticated technology to make such a device. The professor opposes this point by exaplaining that the Greeks did not have to use a large sheet of copper to make mirror. However, they could make it by using the polish cooper in parabloic shape.Also, she explains that they had a knowlege of building small pieces together to form a mirror that used to set the Roman ships on fire.

Second, the article avers that the burning mirror would hvae taken so long to set the ships on fire, so such as weapon would be ineffective and imptractical. The professor disagrees with point by saying that if the burining mirror would have to set the fire on woods of the ships, its goining to take 10 minutes. On ther hand, there are other materials that ships made from them, for example pitches. These seals used as water proof for the Roman Ships. by doing experiemnt, these pitches could catch the fire so quickly, in fact, in seconds only need to set fire on ships. Therefore, the professor concludes burining mirror could be an effective weapon that could spread fire on ships bdue to these pitches.

Third, the reading posits that a burining mirror does not seem like a improvement on a weapon that the Greeks already had, such as flaming arrows. The professor, however, refutes this point by saying that the Roman army had the experience and knowledge to deal with these flaming arrows, in addition to, they could see them from a long distance. But, by using mirror burning, they would not able to figure out where is the exact location that the fires came, And consequently, the Greeks could suprise their enemy much more by using this effective weapon.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...ng the polish cooper in parabloic shape.Also, she explains that they had a knowlege ...
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Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...or example pitches. These seals used as water proof for the Roman Ships. by doing experiemn...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...sed as water proof for the Roman Ships. by doing experiemnt, these pitches could c...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d fire on ships bdue to these pitches. Third, the reading posits that a burinin...
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Line 7, column 69, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...at a burining mirror does not seem like a improvement on a weapon that the Greeks...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, for example, in addition, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 22.412803532 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 30.3222958057 155% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1373.03311258 124% => OK
No of words: 357.0 270.72406181 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78431372549 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.04702891845 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4188871234 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 145.348785872 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49299719888 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 511.2 419.366225166 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8626588965 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 7.06452816374 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 4.45695364238 202% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449927090663 0.272083759551 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160363719747 0.0996497079465 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852600013174 0.0662205650399 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264760222508 0.162205337803 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568851117163 0.0443174109184 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.3589403974 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 53.8541721854 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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