Reading and lecture discusses about whether the theory of weapon burning mirror fire is true or false.
Reading suggests that theory was myth, While professor thinks that reasons set forth in reading are
unconvincing.
First, reading points out that ancient Greeks were not very intelligent to figure out
the method to focus sunlight and cause fire. Furthermore, large copper sheets were
not available at that time to create this weapon. The professor casts doubt on statment made in lecture.
She says that large copper sheet was not created from single sheet, but they
arranged dozens of small sheets in parabolic shape. In addition, she also points
out that Greeks were clever to perform that fine task.
Second, reading argues that in order to cause fire, Roman ship must be static
and required ten minutes to burn wooden ship. Furthermore, it states that this burning
weapon use is impractical as this procedure takes time. However, profressor challenges this point. She thinks that
burning mirror can create fire in ship quickly due to water proof material called pinch sprayed
on the wooden ship. In addition, she brings fact all these procedures can happen with moving ship.
As a result, burning mirror was served as efficient weapon.
Thirdly, reading states there was no valid reason for Greeks to make burning mirror, because they were
expert in shooing burning arrow to destroy enemies from far distance. In contrast, professor thinks that
attacking soldiers can easily spot these burning arrows, so they are not logical in defense. Furthermore, she adds
that burning mirror can not be seen by human, thus burning mirror can set on fire without
even noticing. Hence, professor successfully challenged statements made in reading.
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- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co 71
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... were not very intelligent to figure out the method to focus sunlight and cause f...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to cause fire, Roman ship must be static and required ten minutes to burn wooden ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Furthermore, it states that this burning weapon use is impractical as this proced...
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
... can create fire in ship quickly due to water proof material called pinch sprayed on the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ater proof material called pinch sprayed on the wooden ship. In addition, she bri...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mirror was served as efficient weapon. Thirdly, reading states there was no val...
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Suggestion:
...ance. In contrast, professor thinks that attacking soldiers can easily spot these...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, second, so, third, thirdly, thus, while, in addition, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1498.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 282.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31205673759 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34984136463 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1212979791 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1176470588 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5882352941 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 4.09492273731 464% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 4.45695364238 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345923296389 0.272083759551 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10862380714 0.0996497079465 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079589603343 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109202070432 0.162205337803 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720605968836 0.0443174109184 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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