TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

In this set of materials, the reading passage provides three reasons in order to states that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and Greeks never built this device. However the speaker expresses these reasons are inconvenience and refutes them.
First of all, the author mentions the ancient Greeks weren't technologically advanced enough to make such a device. This mirror that would focus sunlight was very wide and consisted of large sheet of copper. But based on the lecture, some of these pieces of copper recently has discovered. This discovering show that the ancient Greeks really built the burning mirror.
In addition, the reading passage states this device would have taken a long time to set the Romanian ships on fire, about ten minutes, and even they have to be unmoving. However the speaker disagrees with this and says that the Romanian ships weren't made of only by wood. They were made of by an additional material which is called the pitch. Pitch catches fire very rapidly.
Finally, the author says emphasizes the burning mirror doesn't seem like an improvement on flaming arrows and they prefer to use flaming arrows in order to set the ships on fire instead of the burning mirror. But based on the lecture, the speaker totally disagrees with this reason. She expresses the Romian could see the flaming arrows and protected themselves from them. But they couldn't sunlight that reflected from the mirror and the ancient Greeks could set their ships on fire very easily.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...yth and Greeks never built this device. However the speaker expresses these reasons are...
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Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
... the author mentions the ancient Greeks werent technologically advanced enough to make...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...tes, and even they have to be unmoving. However the speaker disagrees with this and say...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...h this and says that the Romanian ships werent made of only by wood. They were made of...
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Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...thor says emphasizes the burning mirror doesnt seem like an improvement on flaming arr...
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Line 4, column 143, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ws and they prefer to use flaming arrows in order to set the ships on fire instea...
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Line 4, column 382, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...rotected themselves from them. But they couldnt sunlight that reflected from the mirror...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'really', 'so', 'in addition', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247272727273 0.261695866417 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.181818181818 0.158904122519 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0472727272727 0.0723426182421 65% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0690909090909 0.0435111971325 159% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0327272727273 0.0277247811725 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112727272727 0.128828473217 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0472727272727 0.0370669169778 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.33118495281 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0218181818182 0.0208969081088 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.141818181818 0.128158765124 111% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0145454545455 0.0158828679856 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00727272727273 0.0114777025283 63% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1498.0 1645.83664459 91% => OK
No of words: 253.0 271.125827815 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9209486166 6.08160592843 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04852973271 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363636363636 0.374372842146 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256916996047 0.287516216867 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126482213439 0.187439937562 67% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0711462450593 0.113142543107 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33118495281 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505928853755 0.539623497131 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6503942814 53.8517498576 88% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0529801325 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0714285714 21.7502111507 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2846119798 49.3711431718 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 132.220823453 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0714285714 21.7502111507 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.878197800319 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.39072847682 206% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.7631281762 50.5018328374 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.4358974359 1.90840788429 75% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.703911018043 0.549887131256 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.106363162177 0.142949733639 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0605574284545 0.0787303798458 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.569283603151 0.631733273073 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14817329926 0.139662658121 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.296746927475 0.266732575781 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138791089076 0.103435571967 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.375646186338 0.414875509568 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0497346501011 0.0530846634433 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.505870459282 0.40443939384 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673341236767 0.0528353158467 127% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.26048565121 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 3.49668874172 57% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.2958057395 87% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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