TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

The main idea of both the passage and the lecture is about Sinosauropteryx was a feathered dinosaur. In this line of thought, the reading states that Sinosauropteryx don’t preserve in the volcanic ash and are fibered and not feathered, and there is no evidence about their colorful skin. The lecturer, on the other hand, casts doubt on all of the three episodes of arguments mentioned in the passage, believing that none of these strategies are practical and lead to the real world. In the rest of the passage, a comparison between them is provided.

First of all, the reading and the listening materials talk about Sinosauropteryx don’t preserve in the volcanic ash. The author explains that the critics point out that the fine lines may not even represent functional structures of a living dinosaur, but rather structures that were formed after the animal’s death. After the animal died and was buried in volcanic ash, its skin may have decomposed into fibers. Thus, the author contends that the skin fibers then became preserved as lines in the fossil; the lines were misinterpreted as evidence of feathers. On the contrary, the lecturer believes that resulted for the belief of critics about destroying fossils in the volcanic ash is the critics don’t see such these fossils which preserve in this harsh conditions. She thinks that these fossils are well-preserved. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates.

Second, both the text and the talk discuss Sinosauropteryx are fibered and not feathered. The author points out that even if the fine lines are remains of real structures of a Sinosauropteryx, scientists cannot tell with certainty what part of the dinosaur’s anatomy the structures were. Many dinosaurs had frills, ornamental fan-shaped structures growing out of some parts of their bodies. Therefore, the author elaborates that some of the critics argue that the lines surrounding the skeleton are much more likely to be fossilized remains of frills than remains of feathers. However, the lecturer notes that there is a chemical difference between x and y. x has protein baby crocks, but y has not the same chemical feature. Also, the beliefs that the scientists found the Sinosauropteryx has x characteristics. This was another place where experience contradicted the theory.

Eventually, there is no evidence about their colorful skin which is discussed by both the passage and the lecture. The author mentions that the fact that the usual functions of feathers are to help animals fly or regulate their internal temperature. However, the structures represented by the lines in the Sinosauropteryx fossil were mostly located along the backbone and the tail of the animal. Hence, the author suggests that this would have made the structures quite useless for flight and of very limited use in thermoregulation. This suggests that the lines do not represent feathers. The lecturer rebuts this argument. The lecturer states that some animals use from their characteristics in their life. She provides one example about pick coke birds. This spacious use the colorful feature to show own self. According to the data which gathered until now Sinosauropteryx has orange and white color for showing themselves. This opinion directly contradicts the passage presented and making it infeasible.

Sum up, although the passage provides some reasons to Sinosauropteryx was a feathered dinosaur, the lecture opposes about the effectiveness and possibility of those reasons.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...urer, on the other hand, casts doubt on all of the three episodes of arguments mentioned i...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
.... Therefore, the author elaborates that some of the critics argue that the lines surroundin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 10.4613686534 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 7.30242825607 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 22.412803532 192% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 30.3222958057 211% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2972.0 1373.03311258 216% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 556.0 270.72406181 205% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34532374101 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.04702891845 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04154292851 2.5805825403 118% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 145.348785872 184% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480215827338 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 925.2 419.366225166 221% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 19.0 8.23620309051 231% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 13.0662251656 237% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.0542690371 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8709677419 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.935483871 21.698381199 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25806451613 7.06452816374 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 4.45695364238 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.27373068433 351% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.609326665195 0.272083759551 224% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137356342334 0.0996497079465 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135461341821 0.0662205650399 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318753675911 0.162205337803 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151304108872 0.0443174109184 341% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 63.6247240618 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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