TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

Both the reading and the lecture are about carved stone balls founded in Scotland. The author of the reading article provides us with three possibilities of what these balls were used for. While on contrary, the lecturer cast doubts on those hypotheses and says they are unconvincing and provides us with the reasons why not.
First, the author points out that these balls may be used as weapons either for hunting or in fights. The article mentions that there were halls founded on the balls so it is possible that they were attached to strings to allow them to be thrown on the aim. The professor challenges this point. She says that it is impossible that these balls were used as weapons, if so we should found some cracks on it or even found them in pieces, but this is not the case. They were found in good intact shapes with no dents or grooves.
Second, the author contends that these balls may be used as a primitive weighting system. As the article elaborates that they were uniform in diameter so they may be used as a standard unite of measurement. The lecturer refutes this idea. She mentions that the balls were made out of different stones which make them of different wights. They may have the same diameter but they had totally different wight. So impossible there were used as weighting system.
Finally, the author says that they may be used as a sign of the importance of their owners. As it is mentioned the balls were having elaborated designs to show the social importance of their owners. The professor totally disagrees with this idea. She says that the is not true. She elaborates, if so why there were other balls with very simple designs on it, and why we couldn't found any of these balls in the toms of their owners, as it was known about the people that time, they were burying their possesses with there bodies. This proves they weren't used as indicators of the social importance of their owners.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sign of the importance of their owners. As it is mentioned the balls were having e...
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Suggestion: couldn't
...h very simple designs on it, and why we couldnt found any of these balls in the toms of...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...ses with there bodies. This proves they werent used as indicators of the social import...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 10.4613686534 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 22.412803532 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1373.03311258 116% => OK
No of words: 344.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61046511628 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31088378833 2.5805825403 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 145.348785872 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43023255814 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 485.1 419.366225166 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5195108672 49.2860985944 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3 110.228320801 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 21.698381199 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35 7.06452816374 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403616250649 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131263630559 0.0996497079465 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797434466372 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261932046619 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389409228066 0.0443174109184 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.3589403974 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.2367328918 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.42419426049 83% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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