TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The article states that there are numbers of reasons that show living on Venus is not possible. However, the professor explains none of author's reasons are convincing and refutes them one by one.

First, the great atmospheric pressure on Venus can damage spacecraft within the time that need for landing. As the reading claims, is refuted by the professor. He asserts that on the top of the Venus atmosphere the pressure of gas is lower than the beneath part of the atmosphere. Moreover, this pressure is not high enough to threaten human life.

Second, according to essay there are no source of water on venus surface and the atmosphere of Venus made up of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and sulfuric acid, but no composition of water or oxigen can be find there. Nevertheless the professor argues that human can build water with the compositions of gases that are occupy the atmosphere of Venus. So, it remains no concern about water.

Third, based on the author's opinion, a large percentage of sunlight is reflected by clouds and significant number of that absorb with dense layer of carbon dioxide, because of this human does cant build electricity with power cells and with no electricity they cant provide their power of their machine. On the contrary, the professor state that they can use reflected and direct light by preserve on stations. Consequently, the problem of energy can be solved.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'sources'?
Suggestion: sources
...Second, according to essay there are no source of water on venus surface and the atmos...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...n of water or oxigen can be find there. Nevertheless the professor argues that human can bui...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'occupied'.
Suggestion: occupied
...with the compositions of gases that are occupy the atmosphere of Venus. So, it remains...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ern about water. Third, based on the authors opinion, a large percentage of sunlight...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...bon dioxide, because of this human does cant build electricity with power cells and ...
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Line 7, column 262, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ower cells and with no electricity they cant provide their power of their machine. O...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, third, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1169.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 235.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97446808511 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59838024554 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565957446809 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 419.366225166 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.2922310257 49.2860985944 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4166666667 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5833333333 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 7.06452816374 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292795746562 0.272083759551 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968160747553 0.0996497079465 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067820474913 0.0662205650399 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157335922366 0.162205337803 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828970141717 0.0443174109184 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.7273730684 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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