The passage and lecture both are mainly about the living possibility on Venus. While the passage gives three reason-- heavy atmspheric pressure, lack of water and oxygen and lake of light--to illustrate that it would be impossible, the lecture gives one solution that building the station flooding in the atmosphere of Venus, to argue the passage.
To begin with, the passage think that the Venus' amospheric pressure is too great to live in and still not be crushed. on the other hand, the lecture states that the pressure in the venus' sky is not so high and in fact, it could be the same great with that on earth. Considering this, it is verified that we build the living station on the atmosphere of Venus.
Meanwhile, the passage also claims that the lack of water and oxygen on Venus could be the obstacle to the purpose of establishing a permanent station. On the contray, the lecture illustrates that in the Venus' atmosphere some chemicals like dioxide and sulfuric acid exist, which could be utilized to generate water and oxygen. In this case, we can still achieve water and oxygen supply without the transportation of these from earth.
Furthermore,the passage claims that the Venus' thick cloud would reflect most of the sunlight, leaves little for people to generate electricity from their solar power cells. However, the lecture illustrates if we live in the atmosphere of Venus, we can collect the light both of the direct sunlight and the reflecting one. Because we live above the cloud, the light could refect from the cloud and then get to our place.In this case, we could get enough electricity to power the machines and equipment.
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- TPO-41 - Integrated Writing Task Burning coal in power plants produces a waste product called coal ash, a material that contains small amounts of potentially harmful chemicals Environmentalists in the United States are concerned about the damage such harm 85
- TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would 73
- TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...at to live in and still not be crushed. on the other hand, the lecture states that...
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Line 7, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tion of these from earth. Furthermore,the passage claims that the Venus thick clo...
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Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...rom the cloud and then get to our place.In this case, we could get enough electric...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, while, in fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 281.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89679715302 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5484750821 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483985765125 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8385824189 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.090909091 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 21.698381199 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 7.06452816374 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369681021033 0.272083759551 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154774322999 0.0996497079465 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369008811524 0.0662205650399 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231462722435 0.162205337803 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366558938577 0.0443174109184 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.3589403974 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.