TPO-40 - Integrated Writing Task Many scientists believe it would be possible to maintain a permanent human presence on Mars or the Moon. On the other hand, conditions on Venus are so extreme and inhospitable that maintaining a human presence there would

The article and the lecture both discuss the three possible risks come with the possibility of butting a human permanently on the Venus. The author claims the dangers associated with this idea, while the speaker gives an alternative design to overcome these three possible risks and instead of using a human, we can utilize a balloon over the Venus.

First, the author point out the pressure on the Venus is extremely high, and no one can stand. The professor casts douth at this point by explaining that the flooding ballon over the Venus surface is less pressure than on the ground of the plant because it would be at 15 kilometers above so the pressure is normal and the crush cannot happen.

Second, the author argues the diminished quantity of the water on the plant; The professor avers that by telling that the availability of CO2 and Sulfer solves this obstacle. So, we use these elements to produce water, and we do not need to imported water from the Earth.

Third, the reader stats that thick clouds arrest sunlight, and the human cannot survive on the plant without the sunlight. Another thing we have to but in our consideration is the amount of the light that comes back from the plant. The speaker says that the balloon is above the thick cloud, so the cell works by using the light from the sun also the one that reflected from the plant to generate the station.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e can utilize a balloon over the Venus. First, the author point out the pressure...
^^^^
Line 4, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...from the plant to generate the station.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, third, while, another thing

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1137.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64081632653 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28922470958 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54693877551 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 347.4 419.366225166 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1173909186 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2222222222 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 4.33554083885 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308375514822 0.272083759551 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116405114872 0.0996497079465 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423892023397 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162715977617 0.162205337803 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435725961179 0.0443174109184 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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The article and the lecture both discuss the three possible risks come with the possibility of butting a human
The article and the lecture both discuss the three possible risks which come with the possibility of butting a human
The article and the lecture both discuss the three possible risks coming with the possibility of butting a human

The professor avers that by telling that the availability of CO2 and Sulfer solves this obstacle.
The professor avers that the availability of CO2 and Sulfer solves this obstacle.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 12
No. of Words: 245 250
No. of Characters: 1111 1200
No. of Different Words: 129 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.956 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.535 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.241 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 46 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.842 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.712 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4