TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task
Glass is an important part of a building, but birds run into glass because they cannot distinguish it from open air. The article proposes few solutions to fix this problem; however, the speaker thinks these solutions do not stop birds from being injured, and refuses each one of the reasons.
First, the article says that buildings should use one way glass because this glass is transparent in one direction, and the bird cannot see the other side of the glass, so they consider it as a barrier that should be avoided; though, the lecturer says that this glass acts as a mirror which is as much as dangerous for birds because they see the picture of the sky or a tree in the mirror, and they cannot understand that the picture is just a reflection of the actual thing. Eventually, they hit the glass.
Second, the article writes that architects can use colorful designs on the regular window glass, in order to keep birds away from the window while people can see through the openings in the glass that are not painted; however, the professor in the audio says that birds try to fly through opening that are not painted because they think it is a way to cross the barrier, and architects should make these opening very small in order to birds avoid them, but it makes the rooms very dark.
Third, the article says that birds have a natural compass to detect earth magnetic field, and building can make a strong magnetic field in order to direct the birds to other directions, but the professor says that birds use this function just for travelling in long distances for example when they travel from a cold country to a warm country. Birds use their eye and brightness of light to fly in short distances.
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- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 90
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- TPO 41 - integrated writing 80
Comments
Essay evaluation report
in order to birds avoid them
in order to avoid them by birds
flaws:
No. of Words: 305 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 305 250
No. of Characters: 1370 1200
No. of Different Words: 144 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.179 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.492 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.202 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 30 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 32.627 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.455 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.739 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, second, so, third, while, for example, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 305.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6262295082 5.08290768461 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29488523747 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491803278689 0.540411800872 91% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.51434878587 528% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 43.0 21.2450331126 202% => Sentence length is too long
Sentence length SD: 176.728547756 49.2860985944 359% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 201.571428571 110.228320801 183% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.5714285714 21.698381199 201% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06452816374 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.588689428386 0.272083759551 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.260761197327 0.0996497079465 262% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111771996576 0.0662205650399 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.349820396183 0.162205337803 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568413500544 0.0443174109184 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.2 13.3589403974 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 11.0289183223 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 63.6247240618 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.498013245 183% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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