TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The passage mainly presents three methods to keep birds from getting injured because of glasses. However, the professor in the listening part casts a completely negative attitude towards each of three approaches mentioned in previous passage for the following reasons.

First off, the lecturer argues that these one-way glasses won't necessarily be useful because birds outside the buildings normally regard glasses as mirrors. This would engender a bad effect for birds because birds can not understand these mirrors as glasses. For example, when they see these reflections on the glasses as trees and the sky, they would still fly into glasses. Consequently, it still hurts birds physically as before. On the contrary, the reading believe the one-way glass can serve as an indication for birds not to fly thought it.

Second, according to the professor, the unpainted opening area birds see from outside would probably be considered as holes, which will lead birds to fly through. So only if the unpainted areas are extremely small, this situation cannot present itself again. But this would cause problems for people inside the building since the rooms would be too dark to work there. In contrast, the article suggests that the painted color would avoid birds try not to fly through these glasses while people can see out undoubtedly.

At last, as for the magnetic field proposed in the reading section, it is also questionable. This is because the magnetic compass only can be of use when birds travel a long distances trips such as migration from a cold area to relatively warm places, in this case, magnetic field will help them decide which way to fly. However, for the short-distance trip, they use eyes and bright lights to fly successfully to the location they want to reach. Therefore, this magnetic field would not be any of effect for birds at all.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, while, as for, for example, in contrast, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 309.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05501618123 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52041444546 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 145.348785872 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559870550162 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0213702246 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.133333333 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06452816374 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477943288831 0.272083759551 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159927583501 0.0996497079465 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094798013347 0.0662205650399 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263231005347 0.162205337803 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128647114238 0.0443174109184 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.3589403974 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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