TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The article states that many wild birds get injured because they often cannot distinguish between glass, which is a favored building material, and open air. These injure could be prevented and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor states that these solutions won't be effective to stop hurting birds and refutes each of the author's reasons.

First, the reading states that building could replace the regular, clear glass with one-way glass that is transparent in only one direction. The professor refutes this point by stating that this type of glass also creates a problem. He explains that this glass reflects just like a mirror. According to the professor, the birds are not able to understand reflections. If a bird sees the reflection of tree or sky mirror, it will though that it is a tree or sky but not the mirror.

Second, the article claims that by painting colorful lines or other designs on the regular window. People would be able to see through the openings in the design, while birds would see stripes and thus avoid trying to fly through the glass. However, the professor contends that because there is a problem with openings. He explains that birds perceive openings in the design as a hole and they try to fly through them. In order to prevent injuries, holes should be very small, but this would block sunlight and create darkness inside the buildings.

Third, the reading avers that builders could use the artificial magnetic field. The lecture opposes this point by saying that birds us a magnetic field for navigation only on long distances. On the other hand, for short distances, they rely on their eyes, not on a magnetic field. As a result, the magnetic field doesn't help to solve this problem.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 314, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... field. As a result, the magnetic field doesnt help to solve this problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, thus, while, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91216216216 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38316280139 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557432432432 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7924201867 49.2860985944 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.5294117647 110.228320801 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518843161047 0.272083759551 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14262763461 0.0996497079465 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100164386242 0.0662205650399 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274582692314 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953946452907 0.0443174109184 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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