TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitiv

Reading and lecture discuss some theories about agnostids' possible lifestyle. On the one hand, the writer proposes some theories, providing three reasons of support. However, the lecturer casts doubts on the claims made by the writer, saying that his statements have serious weaknesses.

First, the agnostids weren't free-swimming predators as the writer sustains. This is because arthropods have large, well-developed eyes which help in tracking and catching the prey. Whereas, the agnostids used to have tiny, poorly-developed eyes, and in addition to this some were blind. At least they should have had another feature to help in the process of hunting, but no proof was found. Therefore, the agnostids could not have been free-swimming predators.

Second, seafloor dwellers live in a localized area, and they occupy only a small geographical place, and moreover, seafloor dwellers do not move fast. The writer asserts that agnostids were seafloor dwellers because other primitive arthropods were living this way. Anyway, the lecturer refutes this idea, adding that agnostids occupied large geographical areas, and this means that they were moving fast from one place to another, on long distances. Thus, this standpoint is directly contradicted.

Third, the last theory is not plausible as well, because parasites live on animals in small numbers. Otherwise, a large population of parasites can kill the animal. The proofs found in the fossils show that these marine animals used to live in large populations and, as a result, the last theory does not stand up.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...ous weaknesses. First, the agnostids werent free-swimming predators as the writer s...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, whereas, at least, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 245.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44897959184 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75344167656 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608163265306 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 419.366225166 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4943500981 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 110.228320801 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53333333333 7.06452816374 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412218174551 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129550129391 0.0996497079465 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1021904796 0.0662205650399 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206295332071 0.162205337803 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099652330139 0.0443174109184 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.3589403974 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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