TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

The Reading asserts that sending humans to Mars is impossible because of three reasons.The lecture, however, finds this idea dobious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by the reading passage.
The author argues that travelling to mars takes at least two years so the astronauts may finish food supplies and water and even oxygen. Conversely, the lecture brings up the idea that they can grow plants on water instead of soil therefore they can cultivate food crop and by recycling waste water they can produce fresh water, besides plants absorb CO2 and release oxygen.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that the zero gravity environment may have negative impact on humans. On the contrary, The professor underlines the fact that the astronauts have been learnt to have safety management of their bodies. For instance they can overcome decreasing muscle mass by regular exercise and use vitamins in order to do not have low bone density.
Finally, it is stated in the reading passage that astronauts would be exposed to dangerous levels of radiation. In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that the sun does not have dangerous radiations all the time and it emits this particles occasionally so they can equip the spaceship by small shelter with light weight and they use this shelter only in dangerous circumstances until the danger pass.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
... is impossible because of three reasons.The lecture, however, finds this idea dobio...
^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...asons proposed by the reading passage. The author argues that travelling to mars t...
^^^
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mar'.
Suggestion: mar
.... The author argues that travelling to mars takes at least two years so the astrona...
^^^^
Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...us radiations all the time and it emits this particles occasionally so they can equi...
^^^^
Line 4, column 330, Rule ID: LIGHT_WEIGHT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lightweight'?
Suggestion: lightweight
...uip the spaceship by small shelter with light weight and they use this shelter only in dange...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, conversely, finally, furthermore, however, may, so, therefore, at least, for instance, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 10.4613686534 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1156.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 228.0 270.72406181 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0701754386 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53013539225 2.5805825403 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609649122807 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6366078068 49.2860985944 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.5 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5 7.06452816374 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0743919184547 0.272083759551 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346283531939 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292575937965 0.0662205650399 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0476797239792 0.162205337803 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265407333606 0.0443174109184 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.3589403974 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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