tpo40 Q1 rewrite

Essay topics

Both the reading passage and the lecture are about dinosaurs. The author of the reading passage feels that dinosaurs were endothermic. This idea is challenged by the lecturer. He is of the opinion that dinosaurs were not endothermic.
First of all, the author argues that they were warm-blooded animals because their fossilized structure was found in the polar regions. In the article, it is mentioned that only animals capable of maintaining their body temperature can survive in the polar regions. This specific point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that dinosaurs were present there during the warmer period and migrate to the new area when the temperature drops down. Additionally, he says that there might be the higher temperatures in the polar regions than today so that dinosaurs were able to live there.
Secondly, the writer contends that dinosaurs' legs were underneath their body so they are endothermic. The article mentions that warm-blooded animals required to have their legs underneath their body. This point is rebutted by the lecturer. He is of the opinion that it is not necessary to have their legs beneath their body to be a warm-blooded animal. Furthermore, he points out that to support their large body structure, their legs were beneath their body, so they are not endothermic animals.
Finally, the author posits that they have Haversian canals , so they are endothermic animals. In the article, it is presented that Haversian canals are only present in the endothermic animals, hence dinosaurs should be endothermic animals. In contrast, the lecturer says that dinosaurs had growth rings. In fact, if they are endothermic then they should have a uniform pattern of their bone growth, but fossils record reveals that they don't have uniform growth patterns, so they are not a endothermic animals.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r posits that they have Haversian canals , so they are endothermic animals. In the...
^^
Line 4, column 304, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r says that dinosaurs had growth rings. In fact, if they are endothermic then they...
^^
Line 4, column 436, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...h, but fossils record reveals that they dont have uniform growth patterns, so they a...
^^^^
Line 4, column 487, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...niform growth patterns, so they are not a endothermic animals.
^
Line 4, column 501, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'animal'?
Suggestion: animal
...patterns, so they are not a endothermic animals.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, in contrast, in fact, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 10.4613686534 249% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 22.412803532 205% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 296.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18581081081 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75820263139 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432432432432 0.540411800872 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 475.2 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 3.25607064018 338% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9497468356 49.2860985944 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2777777778 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4444444444 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 7.06452816374 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0709320684422 0.272083759551 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271893518131 0.0996497079465 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0182941400652 0.0662205650399 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0433140303928 0.162205337803 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157211758928 0.0443174109184 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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