Writing task one TPO
The professor in the lecture casts doubt on the reading passages ideas, and he says colonization an astroids is not a practical idea because each solution has serious downsides.
First of all, the reading paragraph suggests that astroid low gravity has some benefit because it will make spacecraft land and take off easier than moon or mars and it would also allow a spacecraft to carry much more equipment. The professor argues that astronauts will face many problems because of astroids low gravity. Because of low gravity they will lose their muscle mass and their bone density, thus they will suffer from losing muscle mass and bone density which make that impractical.
Secondly, the reading passage states that the businesses will sponsoring astroid colonization because they could earn more than what they pay by mining minerals and spending back them to the Earth. Thus an astroid colony would be extremely profitable because their source of raw materials such as gold. But the lecturer contradicts that however mining metal seem profitable idea, but we should consider a lot of factors. For instance bringing back precious metal from astroid would increase the cost which reduced the profit off that, and there is no guarantee that their prices stay high in the future.
Finally, the author asserts that astroids are a good option for colonization because some of them would be very easy to reach, which make them much easier and more affordable to get to and to get back from then a planet like Mars. While the professor proves that this claim is indefensible by pointing out that astroids orbit is varied, hence maybe they will be close to earth is some point but they will not stay close to it. And getting astronauts from that far distance would be challenging.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an astroid' or simply 'astroids'?
Suggestion: an astroid; astroids
...assages ideas, and he says colonization an astroids is not a practical idea because each so...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'sponsor'
Suggestion: sponsor
...passage states that the businesses will sponsoring astroid colonization because they could...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ls and spending back them to the Earth. Thus an astroid colony would be extremely pr...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 7.30242825607 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 299.0 270.72406181 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96655518395 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42229145424 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555183946488 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 419.366225166 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2019386958 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.0 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1818181818 21.698381199 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2727272727 7.06452816374 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.3589403974 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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