Integrated WritingPrivate collectors have been selling and buying fossils, the petrified remains of ancient organisms, ever since the eighteenth century. In recent years, however, the sale of fossils, particularly of dinosaurs and other large vertebrates,

In terms of whether selling and buying fossils to private collectors is an unfortunate development for both scientists and the general public, the listening and reading are contradictory to each other.

First, the writer makes the point that the public suffers because they are not allowed to view fossils which are sold to private collectors. Therefore, it would lead to a decline in public interest in fossils. However, the professor says a different idea that museums and universities can buy low level fossils from commercial fossil hunting and expose them to the public.

Second, unlike what we read in the reading passage that scientists lose some of the most important fossils and discoveries about extinct life forms, the professor demonstrates that to put a value on fossils in order to sell them to private collectors, fossils are given to scientist for scientific identification. They perform tests on the fossils and are the first ones who the fossils pass through the hands of them.

Finally, the writer states that commercial fossil collectors often destroy the position of oviraptor in the ground and other things in the surroundings, which are important about animal life in the past. In contrast, the professor refutes that and states that it is better to find fossils with some damages than to leave them undiscovered.

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Sentence: They perform tests on the fossils and are the first ones who the fossils pass through the hands of them.
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Sentence: In contrast, the professor refutes that and states that it is better to find fossils with some damages than to leave them undiscovered.
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Sentence: Finally, the writer states that commercial fossil collectors often destroy the position of oviraptor in the ground and other things in the surroundings, which are important about animal life in the past.
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Score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 218 250
No. of Characters: 1098 1200
No. of Different Words: 119 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.843 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.425 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.445 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.726 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4