Sample TOEFL essay: It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Everyone look forward to living in a good as well as a prosperous neighborhood, where there is a variaty in the business fields. Therefore, if a new movie theatre is to be open in my neighborhood , I would be extremely happy and excited. The basis of my view is based on the following reasons.

First of all, the opening of a new movie theater, would promote a new and distict place for people to enjoy their outings. A movie theater is always a fun place to go to, and to enjoy watching a movie with family, friends and beloved ones. Moreover, it is an interesting place for all age groups; kids,...

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Sentence: Everyone look forward to living in a good as well as a prosperous neighborhood, where there is a variaty in the business fields.
Error: variaty Suggestion: variety

Sentence: First of all, the opening of a new movie theater, would promote a new and distict place for people to enjoy their outings.
Error: distict Suggestion: distinct

Sentence: A movie theater would mean a good number of emplyees would be needed to work in the theater.
Error: emplyees Suggestion: employees

Sentence: Some are needed for selling the tickets, others are needed for selling snackes or for leading the audience to the show rooms.
Error: snackes Suggestion: snakes

Sentence: In addition to this, it would escalate vrious job opportunities in the area.
Error: vrious Suggestion: various

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Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 1816 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.529 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.084 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5