TOEFL integrated writing: Chevalier de Seingalt

The reading passage casts doubt on some issues that were stated in the memoir written by Chevalier de Seingalt. The listening passage however,argues those issues, and considers the memoir to be a pretty accurate and reliable historical source.

First of all, the speaker in the listening passage support the fact that Chevalier was a wealthy man, exactly as he mentioned in his memoir. On the other hand, the reading passage contradicts this view, by mentioning the loan that Chevalier had borrowed from a swiss merchant, which according to the reading passage, is a proof that Chevalier wasn't re...

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Sentence: First of all, the speaker in the listening passage support the fact that Chevalier was a wealthy man, exactly as he mentioned in his memoir.
Description: The fragment passage support the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace support with verb, past tense

Sentence: He points out to the fact that there were witnesses who confirmed that Chevalier used to write his conversation with Voltair every night at that time, and he kept his notes for many years, until he eventually referred to them when he dicided to write his memoire, which indicates that these conversations were accurate.
Error: dicided Suggestion: decided

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Score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 9 9
No. of Words: 310 250
No. of Characters: 1521 1200
No. of Different Words: 158 120
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.906 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.477 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.47 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.716 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4