TOEFL TWE Level 4 and sample essay

A typical paper at this level 4:
-- addresses the writing topic adequately but may slight parts of the task
-- is adequately organized and developed
-- uses some details to support a thesis or illustrate an idea
-- demonstrates adequate but possibly inconsistent facility with syntax and usage may contain some errors that occasionally obscure meaning

Topic:
The most interesting class I have ever taken was my Art Value class this year. I believe so due to the following reasons

Essay:
Think of the most interesting class you have ever taken. Why did you enjoy this class so much? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

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First of all, art is the subject I love. If I could, I would spend my entire life just drawing, and I defenitely won't be bored. Unfortunetely, I did not have a chance to study art before, therefore taking this class was a great deal of interest and challenge to me.

Being in this class I have found out so many new things about art, such as its history, techniques, types of materials that are used, and so on. I have discovered many secret talents in myself, which helped me to improve my self-esteme. Due to the things I have learned in this class I participated in several art contest and was really successful.

I think that my that art class won't be as intersting without my teacher. She has invented different games to help us remember important events in the art history and understand how the art techiques and various types of paint work. She was, without a doubt, the most understanding, intesting, and challenging teacher I have ever had.

Taking this class I have learned new things and have found out more about myself. Having such a great teacher helped me to succeed in art contests and to find my way in life. Now I know what I want to be.