A glance at people attitude toward career brings to light a question that has provoked a discussion several times, that is, whether people work because of money or other factors influence their decision. More than five decades ago, people continued their family vocations because they had learnt a lot of information and skill about it. There was not any other opportunity for them to choose their careers. In contrast, modern people in this century face with a lot of career’s options and the money is not a big factor to work. Definitely, we cannot ignore the effect of money but satisfaction and intrinsic sociality of human kinds are two other reasons.
The foremost reason why people work lies in the fact that they want to be part a group and society. This need is met when they work in a friendly environment and participate in activities which make them closer. If a person cannot find a good job, he is more prone to mental diseases such as anxiety and depression. A recent study at Harvard University shows that employees who earn decent salaries but suffers from frantic boss have depression in higher rate than people who get lower salaries with kind manager. This study also states that it is more possible that people abandon their jobs when their work environment is dictatorial even if income is high. Thus, social aspect of work is a determinant factor.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that each person has different talent and skill and enjoy to spend time on it. For example, physicians earn the highest salaries in USA but it is not interesting for a lot of people to see blood and fracture every day. The only reason that make a person to enter medical school and tolerate night shifts and sleeplessness is love to this career. As a student in business school I believe it is really hard to devote all of your weekends to work on courses’ assignments and understand the concept of each lecture while not confuse them. But I really enjoy to get out of my comfort zone and struggle with new mathematics questions. I feel more usefulness this way even without an excellent salary.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I believe that people need to be satisfied internally and be useful for society. In addition, an amiable work environment makes life happier and better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 105, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy spending'.
Suggestion: enjoy spending
...rson has different talent and skill and enjoy to spend time on it. For example, physicians ear...
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Line 6, column 607, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy getting'.
Suggestion: enjoy getting
...re while not confuse them. But I really enjoy to get out of my comfort zone and struggle wit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, thus, while, for example, i feel, in addition, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83497536946 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64948736547 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573891625616 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7394347152 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.315789474 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294178085057 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080520400522 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587642337174 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167689503756 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688964172651 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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