It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
In modern life, people can easily make friend with anyone around the world through social network like Facebook or Instagram. Some people said that it is important to keep our old friends. In another hand, some people believed that we should make new friend instead of keeping old friends. From my perspective, I prefer keeping old friend to making new friends.
First idea came to my mind is your old friends know about you, they know what are your strong points and what are your weak points. Therefore, they have a great influence on you before you make decision. Take my friend, Ho Duc Hieu as an example, when he was a freshman, he had to choose the major he would study in college. He has met his best friend Dang Minh Chau to get some advices because she has played with him for ten years and she know what he like and what his strong point is.
Secondly, old friends are willing to help you whenever and wherever. Because we and our old friends have played with each other for a long time.Therefore, some people would consider their old friends are apart of their family and will try their best to help you. When you have a problem, if you talk with new friends, they won't listen or just give you several advices which every one can give. But if you share with your old friends or your best friends, they will listen to you and give you some advices or some ideas that will help you a lot.
In conclusion, I always consider my old friends are my family and I very respected them because they always help me and have lots of beautiful memories. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writing before making new friend.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o keep our old friends. In another hand, some people believed that we should make...
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Suggestion:
...d friends. From my perspective, I prefer keeping old friend to making new friends...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fore, they have a great influence on you before you make decision. Take my friend...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...s played with him for ten years and she know what he like and what his strong point ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
... played with each other for a long time.Therefore, some people would consider their old f...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a part of' or 'apart from'?
Suggestion: a part of; apart from
...le would consider their old friends are apart of their family and will try their best to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1359.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19045428988 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513245033113 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3693782029 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0714285714 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326985761598 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150731942816 0.076458572812 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118672502448 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217452812651 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131752541914 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.82 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.25 8.01818996416 78% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 86.8835125448 35% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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