Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that young people are more interest to know about celebrities and famous people than older people. Because this kind of issues is more important for them than older people. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that there are a lot of aged people who seriously following the famous peoples, interest to celebrities are related to personal beliefs of each people, not age. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that celebrities are more attractive for young people than for old people.
First and foremost, when people are young each new things can be led to exciting them, because in this aged person naturally have more energy and are happier. they want to find their goal and celebrities give this idea to them. For young people everything that a lot of the number of people follow that are interesting and it is important for friends groups. However, older people found their aims on their life so these things are not very important for them. For example, when I was a teenager I was loved Lala Hatami she is a famous actor in Iran and I had a lot of the number of her poster and films and followed her website. But now she is continuing my favorite actor but I never even follow news about her. Because now I have more major things to do.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that adult people live in the real world they have a lot of responsibility for themselves and their families. they usually, should work very hard and think about eliminating needs of their family. it is possible that some busy people do not go to the cinema more than one year.
finally, older people received to social maturity, it means that they find strong and stable personality so they do not research for a champion. They know what they want from society and themselves. therefore, following celebrities are unreasonable and sometimes laughing for them.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that, it is not reasonable that celebrities have the high impact for old people. because of some psychological aspects and alternation in living condition and their roles in life and also the maturity of their personality.
- TPO 41 85
- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 89
- TPO 11 75
- Do you agree or disagree: It’s more important for the government to spend money to build art museums and music performance centers than to build recreational facilities (such as swimming pool and playgrounds)? 70
- It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ jobs. Agree or disagree? 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76804123711 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55518848674 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481958762887 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9772739304 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3684210526 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229097826331 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830261299812 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730531716902 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130509991073 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775731483711 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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