The chart below, shows the amount of money per spent on fast foods in britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The chart illustrates how much money spent on fast foods per week in Britain. The graph displays the specific period of consumption of fast foods that is 1970-1990.
According to the chart, the expenditure of fast foods have some different income groups in that first High Income group. In this groups most of the Britain People to spent their pence for Hamburgers. Each person spent 40 pence per week, 17 pences for Fish and Chips and 19 pence for Pizza. Coming to Average income group in this 34 pence used to Hamburgers, 25 pence used to Fish and Chips and 11 pence used to Pizza. Next Low Income Group in this group Fish and Chips dominate Hamburgers and Pizza still constant. People blown 14 pence per Hamburgers, 18 pence per Fish and Chips and 8 pence per Pizza.
The graph expose to Britain people fast food consumption period it is 1970-1990. First, Pizza consumption was gradually incresed. It was started from 40 grammes in the year 1970 slowly reached to 290 grammes in 1990. Hamburger's utilization was started from 90 grammes in the year 1970, and it constantly increased till 1985.After that it was rapidly expanded and reached to 500 grammes in the year 1990. Fish and Chips were totally different starts from 300 grammes in the year 1970 and speedily decline reached to 200 grammes in the year 1990.
To, compare chart and graph the huge place occupied by Hamburgers, next Fish and chips and Pizza occupy next two places. The conclusion is most of the Britain people spent their money to Hamburgers.
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Sentence: According to the chart, it has three income groups in that first High Income group in this groups most of the Britain People to spent they pence for Hamburgers.
Suggestion: According to the chart, it has three income groups in that first High Income group. In this group most of the Britain People spent their Pence for Hamburgers.
Sentence: First Pizza consumption was gradually incresed it was started from 40 grammes in the year 1970 slowley increased to reached 290 grammes in 1990.
Suggestion: First, Pizza consumption was gradually increased. It was started from 40 grams in the year 1970 and slowly reached to 290 grams in 1990.
Sentence: Hamburgers utilization were started from 90 grammes in the year 1970 and constantly increased to 1985 after that it was rapidly expanded and reached to 500 grammes in the year 1990.
Suggestion: Hamburger's utilization was started from 90 grams in the year 1970, and it constantly increased till 1985. After that it was rapidly expanded and reached to 500 grams in the year 1990.
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it has three income groups in that first High Income group in this groups most of the Britain People to spent they pence for Hamburgers.
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Sentence: According to the chart, it has three income groups in that first High Income group in this groups most of the Britain People to spent they pence for Hamburgers.
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Suggestion: Refer to this and groups
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and spent
Sentence: First Pizza consumption was gradually incresed it was started from 40 grammes in the year 1970 slowley increased to reached 290 grammes in 1990.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and reached
Sentence: Hamburgers utilization were started from 90 grammes in the year 1970 and constantly increased to 1985 after that it was rapidly expanded and reached to 500 grammes in the year 1990.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to Hamburgers and utilization
Sentence: First Pizza consumption was gradually incresed it was started from 40 grammes in the year 1970 slowley increased to reached 290 grammes in 1990.
Error: slowley Suggestion: slowly
Error: incresed Suggestion: increased
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