The country is a better place for children to grow up than a large city Do you agree or disagree Give your opinions

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The country is a better place for children to grow up than a large city.Do you agree or disagree?Give your opinions.

A child is like the raw clay which can be changed into any shape as desired. Thus, how he becomes in future depends on the place where he grows up. I personally believe that the country is an ideal place for children to grow up. However,rearing the children in large city is also beneficial to to some extent.

Generally, the countryside is peaceful and it is beneficial to rear children in such peaceful environment helps to accelerate the mental development of a child. Similarly, the country has fresh, healthy and pollution-free environment which contributes in good health of a child. Likewise...

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Generally, the countryside is peaceful and it is beneficial to rear children in such peaceful environment helps to accelerate the mental development of a child.
Description: two verbs in one sentence.

Sentence: However,rearing the children in large city is also beneficial to to some extent.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a preposition
Suggestion: Refer to to and to

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No. of Different Words: 165 200

Always put a space after punctuation marks. E-rater is sensitive.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 349 350
No. of Characters: 1683 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.322 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.822 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.82 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.382 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

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Generally, the countryside is peaceful and it is beneficial to rear children in such peaceful environment helps to accelerate the mental development of a child.

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