does the best things in this world cost money?
What are the best things in this world? Health? Happiness? Traveling? No matter what is your answer. All of them will cost you. That’s why, in my view, all best things cost money. Nothing is free in this world and except all things which has given to you by God, all other things need money. No matter how much simple is the thing that you want to do; at least it will cost a buck for you. Here I have two reasons for holding this idea.
First, health which is the key to happiness costs money. If you want to stay healthy you need healthy foods like organic foods which cost much more than other foods. Or if you get sick you will need lots of money. Why so, most of good hospitals which cut the edge and are really good are private hospitals and you must charge them to receive good treatment. Besides that, regarding to our bad food diets and the lack of sufficient mineral components in our foods, you need to take several drugs like multi-vitamins to keep your body healthy and all these drugs are expensive too. So that is why some people who cannot afford the cost of being healthy prefer to do some remedies instead of receiving new and good treatments.
Second, happiness cost a bundle for you. Just imagine that you have five days off and you want to spend your free time with your buddies. The first thing that comes to our mind is going to a trip with our friends. But all those nice places where we see their pictures on the internet and we really seek an opportunity to go there are really expensive even if we stay there just for one night. By adding up the costs of tickets, foods, transportation and other needed thing, we will surely need notable amount of money which may be even more than the amount of money that we have saved for rainy days. Last summer I when to Dubai for a week and it cost for me even more than my university tuition.
To cut the long story short, in my view, not only the best things in this world are not easy to get, but also, they are expensive too. Each time we decide to do something funny the first thing that crosses our mind is that how much will it cost for us? And that is why, sometime, we simply ignore so many things we have always wanted to do just because we are out of money and we cannot afford it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, really, regarding, second, so, at least, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27083333333 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.04202750444 2.67179642975 76% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486111111111 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3514876953 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.8636363636 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285613032179 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111999856866 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126276456942 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205165267049 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128471477565 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.33 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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