Making the dormitories available to students enrolling in the college is a good idea and this will certainly provide benefits to the students and will add a value to the college. Making dormitories is hard on the budget and when something which will consume a whole lot of funds from college, it should be properly planned. Any wrong speculation can lead to a blunder. Also, college should see if there is any other priority than making dormitories like building labs and other infrastructure.
Authors statement starts with the argument saying that the enrolment is growing, well that’s fine with the number but it does not give information about whether the local students are applying more or it is the students from other states. Efforts will go futile if the students are local because they will be able to commute to the college and then the facility will have no use. It can be another way around, there can be more students from other states and can surge the dormitories making the facility lacking enough room to get going. Afterall college will not start building another one if they found out more students are coming from abroad. This information should be cleared and then only planning should be done on how big the dormitory should be.
There is another weak argument that the enrolment will double over next 50 years. This type of argument has no certainty even if the college has made the observation from surveys. 50 years is a long time and in this period the trend can vacillate and students may find another college more attractive than this. Their conclusions should not be made on the basis of what will happen after half a decade. The investment should be done based on present conditions.
The other area which needs to scrutinize is the problem with the rent. The statement is saying that rent has increased in recent years. Well, this absolutely puts the financial burden on the students but there is a certainty that this may be temporary. If so, students will again move to houses and the dormitories will be void of them. Also, the rents with neighbouring state and colleges should be compared. We don’t know if this will be less than other places. If so, students may still find the rent prices lucrative enough and will go on to live in rented houses. The information regarding this is vague and more data should be collected to make the conclusion.
In the end the conclusion made that attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enrol at Buckingham is just based on weak arguments and without proper research and planning the execution of the dormitories can go wrong. College should see what is the priority and whether there is exigency in the case of students not finding the proper house. The trend should also be compared with other states and colleges. After all the data collected proper decision should be made as this will consume a big fat chunk of money from the college's coffer.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In the end the conclusion made that attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enrol at Buckingham is just based on weak arguments and without proper research and planning the execution of the dormitories can go wrong.
Error: enrol Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2407 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.701 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.333 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.467 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.06 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: WHOLE_LOT[1]
Message: Use simply 'lot'.
Suggestion: lot
...and when something which will consume a whole lot of funds from college, it should be pro...
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Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rong speculation can lead to a blunder. Also college should see if there is any othe...
^^^^
Line 3, column 545, Rule ID: AFTERALL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: After all
...ility lacking enough room to get going. Afterall college will not start building another...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...crutinize is the problem with the rent. The statement is saying that rent has incre...
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Line 9, column 556, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...nsume a big fat chunk of money from the colleges chauffer.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, well, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 36.0 12.9520958084 278% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2469.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83170254403 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52146699585 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442270058708 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.5378175817 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9615384615 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6538461538 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42307692308 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162828738712 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499061263985 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320121470904 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103781004919 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274379562254 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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