The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration presents the stages of the life cycle of one of the big fish variants, namely the salmon. Overall, it is clearly illustrated that salmons undergo 3 stages of transformation throughout their lives beginning at their egg form until they reach adulthood.

At the start if its life, the salmon egg is laid down on pebbles resting beneath reeds that are found in the slow-flowing waters of the upper parts of the river. The egg stays there for approximately 5-6 months until it hatches to become a fry. During this stage, the fry, already capable of swimming, swim its way towards the faster-flowing lower rivers. Apparently, they grow to about 3-8 cm while inhabiting these banks, which may last to approximately 4 years.

The third stage of the cycle is in the form of the smolt. In this stage, the salmon expands more than double in size to at least 12 cm up to 15 cm in length. They journey from the river banks to the open sea, which marks the start of their adult stage. Towards the end of its life cycle, the adult salmon can grow to a hefty 70-76 cm- long fish. It spends about 5 years of its adult life in the open sea until such time that it is ready to mate and lay its eggs, in which case, it goes back to the upper river, where another life cycle of a salmon commences.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: double
...his stage, the salmon expands more than double in size to at least 12 cm up to 15 cm in length...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, if, may, third, while, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 33.7804878049 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 240.0 196.424390244 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42083333333 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.73543355544 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40395724102 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 106.607317073 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0483782767 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4545454545 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90909090909 5.23603664747 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11472858762 0.215688989381 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479783546448 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512146030484 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815674926975 0.15604864568 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378561136125 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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