Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.To what extent do yo u agree with this statement?

Nowadays, people are always in a hurry, and as a result of hectic lifestyle, they hardly find time to cook proper meals for themselves. Consequently, an excessive consumption of junk food leads to health issues such as diabetes, high cholesterol, cancer and etc. There are some people who believe that governments should implement heavy taxes on fast food. Personally, I partly agree with this idea because of the following reasons.

On the one hand, it is irrefutable that implying the high tax on junk food would discourage consumers especially students and children from consuming it. The reason why is only paying a big amount of money for food which has harmful and ill effects can deter them gaining a lot of fat or weight and getting really out of shape. Moreover, when people cut down on eating fast food and making time to cook at home instead, they can easily save up and utilize this amount of money on something useful or beneficial. For instance, last month I cut back on my outlay for fast food and surprisingly I saved 150 dollars which I spent it on booking an IELTS exam.

On the other hand, applying heavy tax is not the only way to tackle this issue, obviously, other effective methods need to be considered. Firstly, authorities should limit the advertising of fast food eateries such as KFC, Mc Donald’s, King Burger and etc. in public places, especially in school areas or campuses. Secondly, as a consequence of imposing a high tax on fast food, the unemployment rate will be high, therefore it will cause many social problems such as committing crimes, robberies and so on. On account of that, the government should make healthy food more affordable than fatty food.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that high taxes should be implemented by the government, I also believe that there are other useful ways.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 255, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...h as diabetes, high cholesterol, cancer and etc. There are some people who believe that ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 254, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...h as KFC, Mc Donald's, King Burger and etc. in public places, especially in school ...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88535031847 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72718593154 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614649681529 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2937091866 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4285714286 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3571428571 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994742585218 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368804747355 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376240437708 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055237179077 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341191290018 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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