The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
SInce the number of people not meeting the current specified fitness level has declined in 20 years, earlier evaluation of adequate fitness level was different from now as stated in the argument. As we have seen that now a days, people are becoming more health conscious and standard for fitness are ever increasing, comparing two results through different spectacle will surely give disparate outcomes. Again defining what are the parameters used to judge people's fitness level will also give a better insight, as to what exactly is the reason for decline in fitness.
The argument states that o...
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Sentence: The argument have assumed that citizen of corpora have been hit be bad economy and they have reduced expenses on fitness product.
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Sentence: May be if we would have used the older standard, percentage of fit people might remain same or may even decline based upon how stringent or lax current standard is. unless and untill we do not know this, comparison would not be moot.
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Sentence: Again what paramenters were taken to decide the fitness level will be necessary because if we know the detailed result, we can corelate the common fitness symptons caused by computers ans compare it with the result and see, if the computer is the reason for decline in fitness or not.
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Sentence: But if low fitness level is due to other symptons which are not believed to be a aside effect of computer then only relation can be drawn.
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Sentence: The cause of unusually low level of expenditure in this year on fitness product and services have been given tha cause of low fitness level.
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Sentence: May be there is genral decline in enthusiasm for fitness level be the cause.
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Sentence: These very assumptions is necessary to ascertain the exact cause for the decline in fitness level and also what will help increse the fitness level back.
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