The diagram below show the stage in the development of simpl cooking equipment.

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The diagram below show the stage in the development of simpl cooking equipment.

The given three daigram a A, B or C depicts the process of improving cooking device. It is clearly and coherently represented.
Conclusion: overall; three distinct stage in the process the start the simple process them after time this was more complex equipment.
It can be seen that ; at the first stage of simple cooking equipment, there was simple cooking pot on balanced on three stone over a fire grass.the second diagram reveals the How the good prepare the food help of clay shield . It was around the fire to protect the heat from the wind.
It was crystal clear, in the final stage show on the diagram .the fire was closed the metal base to control the heat ,and level of protection. There was a door at the front , which was used for enter air or removed the ash. Charcoal used asa coal ,and it is burnt on the grate . Which is inside the sheld line mode with clay. In addition to this, there were the metal suport,so that pot balance on stove ,and handle for easy transportation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: a
The given three daigram a A, B or C depicts the process of improvin...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ood prepare the food help of clay shield . It was around the fire to protect the h...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ire to protect the heat from the wind. It was crystal clear, in the final stage s...
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Line 4, column 61, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
..., in the final stage show on the diagram .the fire was closed the metal base to co...
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Line 4, column 117, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...losed the metal base to control the heat ,and level of protection. There was a doo...
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Line 4, column 162, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...level of protection. There was a door at the front , which was used for enter air...
^^
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...otection. There was a door at the front , which was used for enter air or removed...
^^
Line 4, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... removed the ash. Charcoal used asa coal ,and it is burnt on the grate . Which is...
^^
Line 4, column 248, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...removed the ash. Charcoal used asa coal ,and it is burnt on the grate . Which is ...
^^
Line 4, column 278, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... asa coal ,and it is burnt on the grate . Which is inside the sheld line mode wit...
^^
Line 4, column 281, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...a coal ,and it is burnt on the grate . Which is inside the sheld line mode with clay...
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Line 4, column 376, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...ion to this, there were the metal suport,so that pot balance on stove ,and handle f...
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Line 4, column 405, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...etal suport,so that pot balance on stove ,and handle for easy transportation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, second, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54189944134 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33748239399 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620111731844 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.626001135 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215246347048 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629692807785 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914722730109 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126035735646 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734384174759 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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