Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the teachers and parents most of the time have some difficulty with children because of over using from the electronic devices. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that this veiw is not true because suing from this electronic device have a lot of benefits to increasing children knowledge and it is helpful for their study. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that educating children is a more difficult task than it was in the past.
First and foremost, most of the students using from this device in the classroom. Most of the teachers are unsatisfy because in contrast to schools police all of children have cell phone in the school. They believes that the student do not have a mature ability of make decision in reasonable shape because of their special age condition. Thus, students used from their electronic device in the classroom, For example, download musice or films and chat with their friends. It is led to they have not enough consentration to the teachers lecture and also, it is distracted other students who want to listen to the teacher speech. Unfortunately, this condition even distracted teacher and affected on their teaching quality.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the cosideration is that through this device student have access to internet space and also some content that it is not suit from their age. children can access to some harmful and in contrast with ethics, it content can have very harmful effect on their mind. In addition most of the computer games have very violent sujects and it can be led to extention of wildly behavior between students. For example, in the last month I read an artcul in the newspaper about a student that kill a lot of other children in the school. We know that this kid of happens increased in the reacent years.
Finally, it is clear that these device are one of important portion of our modern world and anypne cannot removed these device from the adult or even children life. it is make the task of teachers and parents more difficult because they have big responsibility for toght to the children and inform them about the correct way of using from this device. brcause, surely, the electronic device provide a huge number of benefites for poeple. Therefore, it is strong task for education managers and social managers and parents to have effective plan for teaching children and provideing safe especially internet space for children used.
on the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am coinvinced that eduating children when they have used from electronic divice is more difficult task. becuase, they have not enough knowledge about correct used of this divice and some harmful information that they learn from internet or some games.
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 76
- TPO 50 3
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. 81
- Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. 66
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 97
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'believe'
Suggestion: believe
...ren have cell phone in the school. They believes that the student do not have a mature a...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...ent that it is not suit from their age. children can access to some harmful and in contr...
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Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...e very harmful effect on their mind. In addition most of the computer games have very vi...
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Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this device' or 'these devices'?
Suggestion: this device; these devices
...ent years. Finally, it is clear that these device are one of important portion of our mod...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this device' or 'these devices'?
Suggestion: this device; these devices
... modern world and anypne cannot removed these device from the adult or even children life. i...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...e from the adult or even children life. it is make the task of teachers and parent...
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Line 7, column 353, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Brcause
... correct way of using from this device. brcause, surely, the electronic device provide ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...ly internet space for children used. on the basis of reasons that mentioned abo...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Becuase
...ectronic divice is more difficult task. becuase, they have not enough knowledge about c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91823899371 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49891308906 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454926624738 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5909780616 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.3 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.85 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149024322446 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559440868702 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737667354972 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997867689079 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528840779492 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.