146.Some people prefer to spend their free time outdoors. Other people prefer to spend their leisure time indoors. Would you prefer to be outside or would you prefer to be inside for your leisure activities? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.
Nowadays spending leisure time is one of the most important concerns for people, especially for youth. Certainly, with our sophisticated lives, which is spent just in studying or working, having a good plan for free times is crucial. All in all, people are different in thair taste of planing for spare times. Some people like to spend their spare time indoors. On the other hand, most of the people including me prefer to schaduale going outdoors in their free time. In my judgment, spending leisure time outdoors is more wisely than indoors. Because, being outdoor we can enjoy nice weather and landscapes, also we can benefit freedom in taking actions, in addition we can make diversity and concequently change mood.
The main reason of selection outdour is enjoying weather and landscapes. Definitely, everyone has experienced nice climate of special green lands which are suitable for camping, there gave wounderful feeling to visitors. Althoug going to wildland and nature has some struggels, its advantages are outweighted. Beeing outdoors not only we can enjoy the beayties of nature and good weather but also we can experience amazing feeling of inventure. For example, I remember three years ago when I was a High school student in Berlin. Ones my friends and I decided to go to a waterfall near berlin, we did that and it was very good experience and we enjoyed a lot in that green jungle with nice weather. in fact, that made our spirits fresh. So that, I am concerned that best choice for spending free time is going outdoors.
second reason which leads me to prefer outdoors is freedom that offers us. Nodoubt, when we are at home we are limited. Generally, aat home and indoors we cannot to lots of activities. In contrary, If we be outdoors, We will be able a variety of wounderful activities like singing, playing, cooking odd foods, and doing some ridiculous actions. For instance, a couple weeks ago I went outdoor with my friends. It was very amazing we did lots of extraordinary thing, we lought, played some traditional plays, and also we had a wounderful dancing time, and at night we cooked a very odd meal for ourselves. Therefore, I am positive that, outdoor is the best place for having freedom and doing some ridiculous works with friends.
Last but not least is the diversity and changing mood. certainly, everyone wants to relax in his spare time and changes his mood. choosing a place in outdoors for visiting even indiscriminately is the best decision for who wants to have a change in his days. However, at first people show unwilling to go outdoors, going to outdoor they will feel changes in their mood. Thus, It is the best cure for disappointed and dejected people.
In my opinion, Spending leisure time outdoors is preferable. Because of a variety of advantages that provides for us. Advantages such as enjoying weather and views, freedom, and in addition changing mood are the reasults of spending time out of cities. I believe that, It is essential for individuals to be sometimes far away from their house.
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