Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art
which helps to develop quality in people’s lives. However, governments should
spend money on other things rather than art.
Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated where to invest
funds more efficiently for the people’s good. Some believe that art have higher priority,
personally I strongly believe that the fight with poverty, educational and scientific areas are
more vital for a society. This essay will compare both points of view using a variety of
examples to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
On the one hand there is ample evidence that by increasing expenditures to poetry, arts or
cinema shell increase the overall level of culture. The central reason behind this is twofold,
firstly if a child watched lots of love movies and read stories about friendship, he or she
would have higher chances to grow up as a decent citizen. Secondly, propaganda of proper
behavior might diminish the juvenile delinquency in the streets. For example, recent
empirical research by the US police demonstrated that the majority of all young lawbreakers
did not have access to the proper source of culture. Therefore it is conclusively clear that art
has some influence at least on young children.
On the other hand although there is a case for artists, actors and script writers enriching
society, the impact of scientists and teachers cannot be overstated. This is largely because
each dollar invested in education might improve the situation in general. For instance, the
recent developments in genetic could double the production of crops. As a result the mass
production of food is able to reduce the overall poverty and therefore improve the lives of
million people. In addition it is important to mention that scientists are the product of the
educational system. Thus it is possible to state beyond doubt that educational and scientific
areas have a tremendous impact on a society.
From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that although the art creators
influence our lives, the role of intellectual approach is much more practical, it is felt on a
daily basis, and therefore its impact is considerably greater. It is predicted that the role of
knowledge will increasingly grow in importance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in general, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 345.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31594202899 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85303392242 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582608695652 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5615584547 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0618567682894 0.244688304435 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185668399658 0.084324248473 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277921610285 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0147779024759 0.151304729494 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237187509628 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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