In the preceding argument, the author suggested that Buckingham College should build new dormitories due to increasing enrollment and growing apartment rent in town. The author also stated new dormitories are attractive to new students. Although tenable at the face, upon careful scrutiny, it is full of premises and assumptions.
To begin with, the author claimed that student number at Buckingham would double in the next fifty years. Thus, building new dormitories in unavoidable. The assumption here is that the student body will keep growing under the current trend for fifty years. However, larger number of students requires not only more place to live in, but also more professors and teachers to teach them, and more staffs for student services. So, it's unlikely that the school will keep getting more students enrolled at current speed for a long time. As a result, it's beneficial to communicate with college administrations about whether student number will keep rising continuously in the next fifty years to make sure if new dorms are necessary.
Additionally, building upon the evidence that average rent for apartments has been rising in the town, the author stated that more students would choose to live on-campus for that off-campus would become unaffordable for many students. The question may arise here is that the average price in the town might not be able to reflect the housing price around the college, where most students live. It's possible that fast development in downtown made the apartments more expensive, but the price near the college hasn't changed that much, which means it's still affordable for students from Buckingham college. As a result, a more detailed analysis of the apartment market is in needed to evaluate if more students are moving back from off-campus apartments.
Last but not least, the argument believed new dormitories are more attractive to students and can get more excellent students enrolled. No one can deny the fact that good living environment is a key point to consider when selecting schools, but other factors, such as academic reputation, are of more importance. Consequently, building new dorms may cut the college's investment in teaching or research, harming the long-term development of the college. Obviously, all these factors should be considered altogether before a decision can be made.
Due to aforementioned evidence, although rising student number, higher average apartment price in town, and willingness to attract more students are all reasons to have new dormitories, a more thorough and deep investigation should be carried out to reach a final conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2173 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.174 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.752 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 160 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.018 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...pensive, but the price near the college hasnt changed that much, which means its stil...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 359, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'colleges'' or 'college's'?
Suggestion: colleges'; college's
...quently, building new dorms may cut the colleges investment in teaching or research, har...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, thus, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31980906921 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83380905117 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522673031026 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5736779706 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.833333333 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188721643166 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768125604148 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069202977182 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115597728076 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707155815517 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.