Humans are complex mammals. In the nature, there are certain things such as birds fly, lions sleep. But for the people its more complex, every people have different life style. Some people spend their all day in a gym; others in bed. Some people support the idea that nowadays people spend their most of the time on personal enjoyment things rather than essential things which they should do; others disagree. In my view, today do not spend too much time on the things which they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
First, people are work harder than before because they are now that 'there is no free lunch'. As scientist claim, the name of the era is information. And this age every people has access to limitless information. If people work hard and develop themselves. People can be very successful at everything. For example, when I was in university in Canada, I had a friend from India. He states that, because of population life is very hard in India. That's why most of the student in India work harder to study or work in abroad. They know that if they are not work hard, they will be destitute in future. However, if they work very hard and to what should do they can be in top on their are in the future. As a result, people know that if they work hard always pays off, that is why instead of doing enjoyment things, they do what should do.
Second, evolution supports the idea that, nowadays people are mostly do what should do. Evolution states that, if people who spend their time with work and do what should do tends to live longer and happy. That is why, nowadays people are hard worker than before. Maybe in the future people will be work harder and spend their old time with doings their actual things. For example, when I was in university, I read a book about middle age people. Book claims that, in the middle age, people work at most ten hours per week. Which is nothing for our age. In our age people much more than middle age. All in all, evolution supports the idea that, as people live people work harder than ever. It is rule of nature.
To sum up, some people oppose the idea that nowadays people spend their most of time on doing their actual job. Not only, people aware that there is no free lunch but also evolution supports. So, people should do whether they should do in order to increase society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...population life is very hard in India. Thats why most of the student in India work h...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e not work hard, they will be destitute in future. However, if they work very hard and to...
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...to what should do they can be in top on their are in the future. As a result, people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, such as, as a result, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46635730858 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05047708197 2.67179642975 77% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426914153132 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8722104858 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.1666666667 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3666666667 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411164421514 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115963792336 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156054202409 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308169327044 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111198854035 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.8 11.7677419355 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.05 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.42 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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